Walt: write an interesting and detailed recount .
Find , buy , Eat!!! Last Friday we had a market day full of purchasing and selling. I started with 5pt and ended with 18.20 pt . That wasn't even the best bit.
The trade and enterprise group I'm in is kitchen. I made chocolate fudge by myself , the reason why was because my partner was unfortunately at sports. When I tasted it I found it was quite sweet but still yum. We sold the fudge for 2pt. We had a market day to sell the products that we had made. All yr ⅚ people planned and waited for the market for 8 weeks which is three quarters of this term.
In the morning after assembly we set the classes up for our market, because we planned to have it from after morning tea , all the way to lunch. The kitchen group was outside because we had alot of crumbs and we didn't want to get them all over the floor so it was probably a better idea to go outside.
I bought alot of items. First of all Just before I started selling because I had ordered it I got a big lime ice block someone tried to buy it but I said “ sorry I already ordered”. While I was selling I gave my friend 2pt to buy me some hot chips and I was the first person. Soon after that I had sold out so because we had made and uneven amount we spent some pts. I bought a coaster , drum and a yellow slime. But it was a pity I had to leave before the day ended.
While I was selling I found everyone liked it but it was too expensive so I put it down to 1pt and then more people came to buy more. When we had sold out of fudge my buddy and I went around buying items. There were alot of things for sale we had vases , slime , food , ukulele , drums and custom stationary tools.
If we ever have another market I will look forward to it. Due to our currency I am better at getting more profits and bargains.
Recount Writing
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Write for my reader
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I've tried to think about my reader
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My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.
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My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.
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My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
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Purpose
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I tried to meet the purpose
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My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose
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The message is clear in some parts of the recount.
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My text fully meets the purpose.
The message is clear all through the recount.
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Introduction
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My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.
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My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.
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My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.
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My introduction wows my reader!
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Paragraph Topics
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My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.
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I have tried to follow my plan.
Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.
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My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea.
I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.
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My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.
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In this task I wrote a full recount about our market day on Friday last week. I sold alot of things and I also bought alot. I waited until our product was sold out and I made a huge profit.